This looks good. The style is expressive and appealing. Very striking paneling. I love it when artists experiment and use shapes other than rectangles or ovals. The color pallet is pleasant, I like the combination.
Now, time for some constructive criticism. The direction of this comic seems to ramble a bit. It feels more like an art blog than a webcomic. Of course, only two panels are up so far… but that’s just the impression I’m getting. Comics are usually about something. Things like: a story, a cast of characters, a punchline.
Maybe you don’t want any of these things in your comic. That’s fine, more power to you. But you’ve got to have a reason people keep coming back to your site for updates.
Your art is beautiful and original. Keep going, please!
Regarding Joshua’s comment, not all comics have to have a storyline or cast of characters or even a theme; many great comics (including the legendary XKCD) change themes, styles, characters, and even genres all the time. What matters is that what you’re producing is worth seeing. It can help to have some kind of common thread, but don’t hold yourself to it.
I really like the journal comic feel, and “what I was feeling/thinking about when I sat down to draw” is a great theme for a comic. Not everyone likes that, but you can’t please all the people all the time!
Actually, I rather like the small text. It gives the art blatant superiority over dialogue, which unfortunately, many webcomics seem to rely on as a primary output for information. Webcomics – perhaps in my own, personal opinion – should rely more on letting the art tell the story than the writing. Keeping a simple quip at the bottom of the piece gives this comic a special feeling, like I would want to read it out of a simple picture book. The picture tells so much, but the few words finishing it off gives a precise finish to what the artist wished to convey, without giving it all away in an obnoxious wash of text.
On the topic of letting the art tell the story, this comic seems to go back and forth on artistic blogging and a place to put practice art, about half and half. That’s… pretty easy to say, considering there are only two comics up. However, I’d recommend continuing to put only a simple phrase at the bottom of the comic, if this is the style you want to go for. As for the comic’s topic, it’d seem right now like it’s a blog, but it very well could be random clippings of your imagination. I’d love to see how this develops, it’s very charming right now, as it is!
Oh, cool! I’m actually working on my own webcomic at the moment, called Worsted For Wear, that is almost entirely focused around knitting. It’s cool to see I’m not the only cartoonist out there with a yarn addiction!
Lets see…. I like the way you you colored the balls of yarn and I really like the angle you drew the figure from. Foreshortening can be hard, so it’s kinda awesome to see that your already starting to work on it. Go find Andrew Loomis’ book Figure Drawing For All It’s Worth, as that will help your anatomy and foreshortening a great deal. His books are out of print and hard to find, but usually there are a few torrents of them floating around the internet.
If I had to tell you to work on just one thing though, it’d most likely be anatomy, mainly the anatomy of the head. If you keep a sketchbook, start drawing faces and figures in it all the time. Draw faces from magazines, draw your character making dozens of different expressions(Making Comics by Scott McCloud would be a great reference there), and go out to coffee shops(or really any public places) to draw people. Another thing that may help you is drawing the under-structure of the head. Draw the skull, the musculature, etc from all sorts of different angles. And, you’ve probably heard this a few times, but draw from life as much as you can. After a lot of practice and some time, you will notice big improvement in your work if you do.
As for storytelling, characterization, etc. It’s kinda hard to make a critique on that since I only see two drawings up,but I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future! Are you planning on making this a straight-up journal comic or are you going to try a few different things and just see what sticks?
A classic nude in yarn. Very nice. Easy to see. Keep on drawing. Study of anatomy and shading will help a great deal to sharpen up the figures. For characters they need to be drawn a great deal. So you are familiar with their forms and faces. The more you do the easier it will become. Good fortune to you.
Well, I can’t give you any artistic advice, but I have read my fair share of webcomics, so I may be able to give some useful input in that area. I imagine you’re going for a funny comic here, rather than a story-based one. Bear in mind that the typical audience isn’t really going to be into artistic stuff like, well, upside-down nudes… the joke might get lost in the art. Although based on your description of this webcomic, artist types may well be your target audience. And there are certainly plenty of people who read webcomics for just the art (see: Dresden Codak, seeing as it’s hard to follow a storyline that updates on a semi-annual basis).
The art is very dreamlike, very light. That’s good. It’s a feel you don’t get in a lot of webcomics these days. It could use just a bit more hyperbole in the illustration, but that’s just my take – why do something in comics when you can OVERDO it? The gag is… it’s a tad weak, but knowing as many people as I do who have a knitting fixation, it still comes off as cute. I do like the restrained text.
Also cool and yes, I also have way too much yarn! XD
LOVE THIS
Aaron posted this on the Dresden Codak feed, and I like what I see. Keep up the good work
This looks good. The style is expressive and appealing. Very striking paneling. I love it when artists experiment and use shapes other than rectangles or ovals. The color pallet is pleasant, I like the combination.
Now, time for some constructive criticism. The direction of this comic seems to ramble a bit. It feels more like an art blog than a webcomic. Of course, only two panels are up so far… but that’s just the impression I’m getting. Comics are usually about something. Things like: a story, a cast of characters, a punchline.
Maybe you don’t want any of these things in your comic. That’s fine, more power to you. But you’ve got to have a reason people keep coming back to your site for updates.
Hope this helped.
Your art is beautiful and original. Keep going, please!
Regarding Joshua’s comment, not all comics have to have a storyline or cast of characters or even a theme; many great comics (including the legendary XKCD) change themes, styles, characters, and even genres all the time. What matters is that what you’re producing is worth seeing. It can help to have some kind of common thread, but don’t hold yourself to it.
I really like the journal comic feel, and “what I was feeling/thinking about when I sat down to draw” is a great theme for a comic. Not everyone likes that, but you can’t please all the people all the time!
Ditto! I like the your drawing style, but the text is so small and unassuming it’s easy to miss.
Actually, I rather like the small text. It gives the art blatant superiority over dialogue, which unfortunately, many webcomics seem to rely on as a primary output for information. Webcomics – perhaps in my own, personal opinion – should rely more on letting the art tell the story than the writing. Keeping a simple quip at the bottom of the piece gives this comic a special feeling, like I would want to read it out of a simple picture book. The picture tells so much, but the few words finishing it off gives a precise finish to what the artist wished to convey, without giving it all away in an obnoxious wash of text.
On the topic of letting the art tell the story, this comic seems to go back and forth on artistic blogging and a place to put practice art, about half and half. That’s… pretty easy to say, considering there are only two comics up. However, I’d recommend continuing to put only a simple phrase at the bottom of the comic, if this is the style you want to go for. As for the comic’s topic, it’d seem right now like it’s a blog, but it very well could be random clippings of your imagination. I’d love to see how this develops, it’s very charming right now, as it is!
Oh, cool! I’m actually working on my own webcomic at the moment, called Worsted For Wear, that is almost entirely focused around knitting. It’s cool to see I’m not the only cartoonist out there with a yarn addiction!
Lets see…. I like the way you you colored the balls of yarn and I really like the angle you drew the figure from. Foreshortening can be hard, so it’s kinda awesome to see that your already starting to work on it. Go find Andrew Loomis’ book Figure Drawing For All It’s Worth, as that will help your anatomy and foreshortening a great deal. His books are out of print and hard to find, but usually there are a few torrents of them floating around the internet.
If I had to tell you to work on just one thing though, it’d most likely be anatomy, mainly the anatomy of the head. If you keep a sketchbook, start drawing faces and figures in it all the time. Draw faces from magazines, draw your character making dozens of different expressions(Making Comics by Scott McCloud would be a great reference there), and go out to coffee shops(or really any public places) to draw people. Another thing that may help you is drawing the under-structure of the head. Draw the skull, the musculature, etc from all sorts of different angles. And, you’ve probably heard this a few times, but draw from life as much as you can. After a lot of practice and some time, you will notice big improvement in your work if you do.
As for storytelling, characterization, etc. It’s kinda hard to make a critique on that since I only see two drawings up,but I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future! Are you planning on making this a straight-up journal comic or are you going to try a few different things and just see what sticks?
A classic nude in yarn. Very nice. Easy to see. Keep on drawing. Study of anatomy and shading will help a great deal to sharpen up the figures. For characters they need to be drawn a great deal. So you are familiar with their forms and faces. The more you do the easier it will become. Good fortune to you.
Well, I can’t give you any artistic advice, but I have read my fair share of webcomics, so I may be able to give some useful input in that area. I imagine you’re going for a funny comic here, rather than a story-based one. Bear in mind that the typical audience isn’t really going to be into artistic stuff like, well, upside-down nudes… the joke might get lost in the art. Although based on your description of this webcomic, artist types may well be your target audience. And there are certainly plenty of people who read webcomics for just the art (see: Dresden Codak, seeing as it’s hard to follow a storyline that updates on a semi-annual basis).
Interesting.
The art is very dreamlike, very light. That’s good. It’s a feel you don’t get in a lot of webcomics these days. It could use just a bit more hyperbole in the illustration, but that’s just my take – why do something in comics when you can OVERDO it? The gag is… it’s a tad weak, but knowing as many people as I do who have a knitting fixation, it still comes off as cute. I do like the restrained text.
I’ll be keeping my eye on this one.
this was the only one posted on dresden codak which i liked
excellent! <3 yarn – although tbh my downfall is more crochet thread. And kittens. Always the kittens.